domingo, 29 de septiembre de 2013

Writing Assigment #2

Syria’s Disarmament: A Justification to Disarm U.S.’s Enemies

The Syrian conflict began in March 2011, when protestants against the president Bashar al-Assad demanded his resignation. When they took up the streets in demonstrations against Asad’s regime, the government responded with extreme measures, such as kidnapping, torturing and killing protestors and their families. In consequence, civil rebel forces began to arm themselves to encounter the government’s violence. Nowadays, the tension between the government and the rebels became substantial when allegations that the government had used chemical weapons in civilians were asserted. These allegations led to international intervention in order to defend the Syrian’s human rights. In this way, countries such as England, United States, France, Russia, among others, gather together in order to disarm the Arab republic and to avoid an increase in the amount of deaths. Superficially, these are good justifications for the disarmament of the country; however, there are hidden reasons for encourage such measure.[1]
As it had been stated before, one of the main reasons for Syria’s disarmament is the number of crimes against humanity that has been committed against the Syrian people since the use of chemical weapons. But truth is that many murders and deaths had occurred since the civil war began. There have been more deaths caused by guns than the ones which resulted as a consequence of the use of chemical weapons. However, in the last two years before the use of chemical weapons, only a few measures were taken in order to help the Syria people. These measures include refugee camps, food aid, medical supplies, emergency health care and water. Nevertheless, any of these measures included procedures to put an end to this violent confrontation. So, as there are weapons, the number of deaths will continue increasing no matter how many refugee camps would be created.
On the other hand, since Syria has broken the 1925 Geneva Gas protocol which “prohibits the use of chemical and biological weapons in war” (Geneva Protocol), there is a possibility for the United Nations to request of an intervention of the country; yet, this has not been confirmed. Nevertheless, the President Barak Obama had clearly stated that he “would use its political, economic and, if necessary, military power” (New York Times) in order to put an end to the conflict. In this way, the violent conflict in Syria will be halted by using more violence. However, as Professor Sigrun Skogly had explain in a BBC article, “these actions need to be exercised in a manner that is likely to minimise the continued human suffering of the populations and a military campaign may not be the appropriate response in such circumstances”, as the president of the United States is insisting on.
In this way, it may be thought that the United States’ persistent intentions to disarm Syria are far beyond of achieving peace in the Arab republic. As Zaher Mahriqui stated in his article for the Press TV “the objective of the US and [his ally] Israel has always been to disarm any Arab army that might us its weapons against Israel”. In consequence, disarming Syria will be a key point in ensuring Israel’s peace. However, this will be a long way as the Arab republic in not the only thread that the American’s ally has.  So, the aftermath international intervention would just be the American justification to weaken its enemies and any thread against it and its allies.
In conclusion, the disarmament of Syria is a direct consequence of its use of chemical weapons on civilians. This measure is claimed to be in favour of the Syrian people and to avoid more crimes against humanity. Additionally, an international mediation was needed since Syria has broken the Geneva Protocol, which prohibits the use of chemical and biological weapons. However, this last reason for international intervention could only be a mean for the United States to disarm the Arab republic which threads the peace in its ally country Israel.


[1] Expository Thesis Statement

Outline
  • Introduction:
    • Thesis Statement “countries such as England, United States, France, Russia, among others, had gather together in order to disarm the Arab republic and to avoid the increase in the amount of deaths. Superficially, these are good justifications for the disarmament of the country; however, there are hidden reasons for encourage such measure”
  • Body:
    • Measures taken to help Syrian people
    • Break of Geneva protocol
    • Reasons for disarmament
  • Conclusion:
    • Disarmament, a justification to maintain peace in Israel

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Bibliography
1925 Geneva Protocol. United Nations office for disarmament Affairs. Available at http://www.un.org/disarmament/WMD/Bio/1925GenevaProtocol.shtml. Retrieve: September 28, 2013.
Attacks on Ghouta. Analysis og Allegeat Use of Chemical Weapons in Syria. Human Rights Watch. Available at   http://www.hrw.org/sites/default/files/reports/syria_cw0913_web_1.pdf. Retrieve: September 28, 2013.
Landler M. (September 24, 2013) Obama Defends U.S. Engagement in the Middle East. The New York Times. Available at http://www.nytimes.com/2013/09/25/us/politics/obama-iran-syria.html?pagewanted=1&_r=0&ref=syria. Retrieve: September 28, 2013.
Mahruqui M. (September 24, 2013) What does the Syrian Chemical Diarmament Deal Mean?. Press TV. Available at http://www.presstv.ir/detail/2013/09/24/325714/syrian-chemical-disarmament-analysis/. Retrieve: September 28, 2013.
Syrian Civil War. Wikipedia. Availabla at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Syrian_civil_war. Retrieve: September 28, 2013.
Viewpoints: Is thre Legal Basis for Military Intervention in Syria?. BBC News. Available at http://www.bbc.co.uk/news/world-23847169. Retrieve: September 28, 2013.

sábado, 14 de septiembre de 2013

Entry #11: Metacognitive Analysis

We are almost finishing the year, and it is a very good idea to see how my writings had improved or, in the least of the cases, how they have become worsen. In order to do this, it is important to consider the different features that we have been learning throughout the year that had helped me improve. And at the same time, those features which are still flaccid and need my improvement. 
One of the things that I have learnt, and mainly incorporated, this year is the importance of planning all my writing pieces beforehand. Every time I was requested to write something, I used to write the first thing that came to my mind. However, since we learnt the relevance of the five steps in writing (pre-writing, drafting, revising, editing, and publishing), I began to pre-plan my writing, then to write and, before sharing or handing the final draft, I revise and edit it. In this way, my writings became more cleared and organized; since following an order makes the writing more understandable for the reader than writing as the ideas spring.
Another important thing I have adopted in my writing process is the use of different paragraphs according to what I aspire to express. For instance, if I have to compare and/or contrast two or more novels, now, I am able to do it in a better way, as we have learnt how to organize a contrastive paragraph. In this way, when I had to write a comparison essay between the novels “Eaters of the dead” and “Beowulf” for Language and Culture, I was able to fulfil the task, since I implemented this new knowledge.
However, there are some things that I still have to improve. For instance, my topic sentences are too weak. In consequence, I have to pay more attention to them while writing. One way of doing this, is always keeping in mind the main topic of my essay, so the topic sentence has coherence with the whole writing piece. Another way, is paraphrasing it in a way that it is not a simple sentence, but a more complex one. Yet, another problem is the weakness of my paragraphs as well. This can be solved by providing more supporting sentences and not just one as I had done. Either topic sentence or paragraph weakness, I still have to work hard in my writing pieces in order to pass the subject, but mainly to improve myself as a writer.

In all, there are various things that I have learnt and acquired during my writing process that had helped me improve. However, there are still some features that need my improvement, such as the case of topic sentences and the amount of supporting material included in each paragraph. Nevertheless, and even though it is not easy, I consider that I am able to progress in this features.


Vocabulary
Aspire: (vb intransitive) usually followed by to or after: to yearn (for) or have a powerful or ambitious plan, desire, or hope (to do or be something): to aspire to be a great leader
Beforehand: (adj , adv) early; in advance; in anticipation
Flaccid: (adj) lacking firmness
Fulfil: (vb transitive) to carry out or execute (a request, etc)
Implement: (vb transitive) to carry out; put into action; perform: to implement a plan        
Request: (vb transitive) to express a desire for, esp politely; ask for or demand: to request a bottle of wine
Spring: (verb) to move or cause to move suddenly upwards or forwards in a single motion

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Source:
Word Reference. http://www.wordreference.com/. Web. 14 Sept. 2013